Leg Day, Part I

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Welcome to another Round Robin story from the folks at the Parking Lot Confessional. If this is your first time reading, here’s how it goes. Today I’ll post the beginning of a story. My cohorts have no prior knowledge of what’s going to happen beyond these italics. That gives the next person only two days to figure out the next part of the story. Then another two days goes by before the final installment created and posted for your pleasure. I’m kicking this Round Robin Story off with an idea a friend planted just this weekend. Enjoy!

Leg Day

For the third time that day Char got the wheel of her chair stuck in a divot. The third time, and telling from the wrenching crunch, a bent rim. She could look past it though. Look past the ill luck, excessive stares and nervous jitters. She could look past all of it because tomorrow she got her legs.

The closer she got to the day, the more she couldn’t focus on anything else. It was the same every year.

Char looked around the courtyard. Not for help, but to check for witnesses. Not much is more embarrassing. Sure, the kids of the town get stuck and break wheels all the time. The adults, not so much. This will be her eighteenth Leg Day. She shouldn’t be breaking any more wheels.

Rocking side to side, she was able to roll herself out of the divot and continued home. Every few feet her chair lurched to the right. The wheel was definitely bent, but she’d be able to make it home and swap the wheel before her dad would even notice.

Really she knew better than to cross the courtyard, but she was in a hurry to get home. The sooner to sleep, the quicker tomorrow would be here. Char quickly forgot her lurching chair and went on creating her mental list of things she’d do once she got her legs.

When she was younger, and Leg Day came, she ran. She ran until her breath struggled to catch up. She ran until she saw stars. She ran until she puked. She ran up and down the wheel ramps, but mostly she ran through the grass, up the hills, and every place her wheels couldn’t take her.

Char still planned to devote part of her day to running. Running and more. Her dad used to love to climb. Trees, mountains, walls, really anything vertical, so he claimed.

She thought about Cleo and Eddie. They had the same Leg Day and every year they danced. Char didn’t know if it was good, but they smiled, laughed and loved as they spun, hopped and held each other close. So it must have been good. If Char shared her Leg Day. She would chase and be chased, though she never wanted to be caught.

Eventually the running would stop. It was far too easy to tell the homes of Day Afters. They were always too quiet. Quiet unless they had children. It took years for them to get use to the Day After. One year Char thought that if she kept running, run right through the night, she could have her legs for another day. It took her father three hours to get to her amongst the trees where her legs became lifeless and dead to the touch. Char didn’t like to think about that day. There would be plenty of time during her own Day After.

She rolled through the front door, and hurried to the mom’s old room where they kept spare chair parts.

“Charlotte? Is that you?”

She didn’t expect her dad to be home. Her hopes for covering up her bent wheel sank, almost bringing down her mood. Almost.

“What’re you doing home?” She turned to find her dad wheeling in from the kitchen. A waft of bacon followed him.

“Is that–”

“Breakfast for dinner? I know it’s your favorite.”

“Yes!” Char did a little victory wiggle in her chair. “I wasn’t expecting anything until tomorrow.”

The smile on his face faltered. He tried to master it back, but it only looked forced and perhaps painful.

“Char. We need to talk about your Leg Day.”

Come back Wednesday for Part II of Leg Day…

Cold Seeps (Part 2)

And now, the second installment of this week’s round robin, a sadistic little game the three of us occasionally play, wherein we write a story together, in the round and on the fly. Part One, by Amy K. Nichols, is here, and Part Three, by S.C. Green,  will be up on Friday.

Trevor hunched and ran down the cramped hall toward CONTROL, the stale, canned sweat-and-bologna air burning in his lungs. Contact in 18 minutes. Unless Captain followed ROS’s protocol and destroyed it.

“Captain,” he  yelled, climbing the ladder to CONTROL two rungs at a time.

“What do you want.”

“Please, sir, do not engage protocol.”

“No vitals, heading straight for us. What else is there?”

“At 64.7 knots? That’s not fast enough for a torpedo. More likely a probe, maybe the Japanese.”

The Captain clicked his tongue. “And maybe it’s a new kind of weapon, Mr. Renyard.”

“This is a research vessel, not a war machine. We can’t afford a diplomatic incident right now. And, what if it’s alive? ROS would have a hard time scanning vitals.”

The Captain gave him a look that said I want bourbon. “That’d make it some kind of goddamned sea cheetah.”

“A new life form. Anything is possible.”

ROS’s crisp accent lilted over his last words. “Velocity of unidentified object at 62 knots and dropping. Protocol recommendation disabled.”

“Thank God,” snorted the Captain. “Hate that tart telling me what to do. Well, Mr. Reynard, let’s try it your way. Let’s see if we can’t evade this thing’s trajectory, see what we can see. Go man Clippy. ROS, keep scanning for vitals.”

“Aye, Captain,” said Trevor, ROS echoing him eerily.

He took his seat in Clippy’s pod, worked the levers. Outside the ship, the metal arm scissored its sensitive claw open and shut. With Clippy, Trevor could pluck up a single strand of seaweed, or crush a coral reef. He twirled Clippy’s headlights, scanning the darkness. Excitement thrummed in his gut, a twin to the rhythm of the ships engines as the Captain maneuvered them out of harm’s way.

“ROS, how’s the scan coming?”

“Unconfirmed. Velocity of unidentified object at 59 knots and dropping.”

Trevor tapped his fingers. thuddah thuddah thuddah thuhDAH thuhDAH

Stone ping-ping-pinged at his station.

The Captain clicked his tongue. tok tok.

Like we’re some kind of crazy New Age drum circle, thought Trevor as he tapped. But tapping felt good. It made him warm inside. He didn’t want to stop, why would he want to stop?

“Unconfirmed,” said ROS. “Unconfirmed.”

Each consonant and vowel swelled, rolled, as she repeated, until he could not understand the word she was saying, because the word was a false understanding, a coating, the wrapper on the candy bar, the silken teddy dangling from the shoulders of his high school girlfriend. “Alexandra,” he groaned as his fingers tapped on. “Alexandra.”

She was coming, and she was dying, and she was speaking to them through these rhythms, this no-song singing. Red droplets splashed onto Clippy’s console. My blood, thought Trevor. “Alexandra,” he said.

His head filled with light.

To be continued…

Cold Seeps (Part 1)

This week we’re doing  a round robin story — a story written in three parts by the three of us. This story is inspired by the news of James Cameron’s adventure into the Mariana Trench. Below is part one. Part two will be posted on Wednesday, and part three on Friday. Hope you enjoy!

Cold Seeps

At the control panel,Trevor stared headlong into the last half-hour of his shift. Day shift, night shift, who knew anymore. 35,000 feet below, it was only midnight all the time. He flipped the port-side sensors to long-range and yawned. Maybe a few hours in the UV tank would wake up his brain.

Stone tapped on the portal door twice, a cold ping ping. “Want anything from the galley?” He jabbed a wooden toothpick between his teeth and probes. “I’m thinking tuna fish, myself.”

Trevor groaned. “How can you eat that? I eat the tuna and I’m on the john for a week.”

“Nothing, then?”

“Not for me, thanks.”

Stone tapped two more times — ping ping — and his footsteps faded down the hallway. Trevor pulled the report binder from the file shelf and flipped it open to the current page. Clicking the ballpoint open-closed four times, he wrote the day’s date in the left-most column. When the ink formed the last number, he stopped, holding the tip still on the page and making the calculations in his mind. Five months, fourteen days. A long time in the deep. And what to show for it? Pale skin and a serious lack of social interaction. Not that either of those mattered so much. Not as though he had much action above surface. He penned the shift’s counts and readings into each column of the report, noting the most exciting moment at 05:14:37 when a black dragon fish passed the starboard panel, catching Trevor’s eye with its green glow.

Stone returned balancing a carafe of coffee and two tuna fish sandwiches on rye. He fell into the seat at control station two, and spread his dinner (lunch?) out among the keyboards, knobs and switches. “Anything to report?”

Trevor looked at him dead pan and slapped the binder closed.

“You read the new contract?” Stone pulled the wrapping from the first sandwich as though peeling a banana.

Banana. A word picture formed in Trevor’s mind so bright he could almost smell the sweet, tropical flesh. “Haven’t got mine yet.”

“Mph?” Stone swallowed. “Got mine yesterday. You gonna sign back up?”

Trevor shrugged. There were advantages to living below. Peace and quiet. Minimal interaction. He’d learned to meditate and speak French. And he’d written nearly three-quarters of his novel to boot. Amazing what one could accomplish when free of distractions — other than the eight hours out of every twenty-four. But no one had done more than six months below. No one knew the long-term effects. This crew would be the first. The guinea pigs. “Murphy?”

“Ah, yeah.” Stone nodded, pushing food aside to make room for speaking. “He’s re-upped. Said the Mrs. agreed, no hesitation.”

The compensation was hard to turn down.

Trevor sniffed and rubbed his eyes. He’d probably just missed his contract among the other papers and rigmarole from Command. “Yeah. I probably will, too.”

“Racquetball at fourteen hundred?”

“Naw, not today, man. I’m gonna hit the tank. Need some V’s.” He pushed his chair back and stood. Stretched. “Maybe tomorrow.”

“I’m just going to beat your ass again.”

“Probably.” Trevor returned the report binder to the shelf and picked up his mug and backpack. “Have a good –”

The port-side sensor light switched from green to flashing amber and in a tidy, British accent, a female’s voice — the only female voice Trevor had heard in a long time — cooed, “Alert. Unidentified object located off stern. Distance, four nautical miles. Velocity, 64.7 knots. Vital signs, unconfirmed. Series protocol four-point-two recommended.”

Trevor mouthed the words in disbelief as the message repeated.

Four. Point. Two.

To be continued… 

Auspicious Pudding, Part II

This week we’re writing a Round Robin Story. Each of us are shooting from the hip to put a story together for your (and our) enjoyment. If you haven’t already, check out Part I here. Back? Good. And the story continues…

Part II

“The weald,” answered Jasper. He turned to Ty, a little exasperated. “Has the stomach rot gotten to your ears? I just said that.”

Ty’s stomach flipped at the mention of it. The pain didn’t last long as his attention quickly focused on the trees. The trees that shouldn’t be. That couldn’t be there.

They most certainly were there.

A clump of moss gave easily way when Jasper pulled it from the bark of the closest tree. Redwood? Was it even possible for a tree to grow that big?

Ty watched as Jasper sniffed the moss, nodded to himself ,and proceeded to smash the clump in his gnarled hands.

“What are you doing?”

Jasper just hummed to himself. The cuffing of his hands pounding the moss punctuated his song. The tune was only vaguely familiar to Ty. Just when he thought he could place it, Jasper stopped, picked up a sprig of pennyroyal and pressed it between moss-mushed hands. He gave it a good squish and then presented it to Ty.

“Nice. I’m impressed. No, really,” the sarcasm was like a candy coating over each word. “I just feel bad for leaving the Forestry Craft Badge at home. You so earned it.”

Ty went on to say more, but Jasper shoved the sprig in Ty’s mouth. Before he could spit it out, the old man had one hand on the back of Ty’s neck and the other covering his mouth.

“You can thank me later,” offered Jasper.

The grime on Jasper’s hand felt slick and coarse like wet sand paper on the back of his neck. His thoughts whirred from his now grim-streaked neck, to wondering how hands so old and knobby could still be so strong, to the horrible thing in his mouth. To say it tasted like minty dirt would be like calling the moon a rock. It combined the flavor of fresh lawn clippings with the grit of under-stirred hot cocoa. Sure there was an underlying hint of mint, but that silver lining was too thin encompass this gray cloud.

“Now would you stop struggling so I can talk to ya’ proper?”

Ty hadn’t realized he was jerking about, and when he did, he felt wholly justified. He kept it up for just a second longer as to not let Jasper think it was him telling him to that he stopped.

“That should settle your stomach for a bit. Yes, I know. Kinda’ feels like it’s going to do the opposite. It won’t though. Just chew a bit.”

Jasper’s grip loosen, but didn’t let go. He waited to see Ty’s jaw work the mush before going on.

“Good. Good. Now mind you don’t eat it. In small doses it’ll calm the rot. Swallow the whole of it, and we’ll be stopping at every other tree with a soft leaf.”

Ty didn’t want to admit it, but he could feel the knot untie itself in his gut. He didn’t fool himself. It was still there, only loosened.

“I can see it in your eye. It’s working.”

Jasper let go, leaving a mossy hand print in his place. He wiped the remainder on his pants and started rolling his sleeping bag and stowing his gear.

“How… Where did you… I mean,” Ty couldn’t get the words out. He didn’t even know where to begin. The trees? Magpies? The minty grit in his mouth?

“Can your auspex do that, too?” He finally asked.

Ty’s tone said jest, but his eyes begged for something to hold on to.

“Not just any auspex, that’s for sure. Now stop gawpping and roll up your bag. We got things to do and no telling how long to do them in. Move it now. Move.”

Whether by Jasper’s design or not, Ty was grateful for the busy work, moving in the familiar motions of breaking camp, rolling this, packing that. He didn’t know how longer Jasper had been talking before he started listening.

“—to see this. It’s good though. Very good. Maybe lucky even.”

“Jasper?”

“Son, if I told it all now, how am I to enjoy the look on your face when we get there?”

His smile was as much sincere as it was concealing.

Tune in this weekend for the stunning conclusion! (No pressure, Amy.)

Auspicious Pudding, Part I

Pianos. Penguins. Pandas. Ty rubbed the sleep from his eyes.

“Oh my God.”

Jasper wormed around in his sleeping bag. “What’s up?” he said muzzily.

“If a flock of crows is a murder,” Ty said quietly, “And a flock of rooks is a parliament, what’s a flock of magpies?”

“A tidings. Or a charm.” Jasper fumbled about in the grass next to his head, located his wire-rim glasses, and hooked them over his ears. “Or sometimes, also a murder.” He looked up. “Holy God.”

“That’s what I said,” muttered Ty. The trees circling their campsite were covered in a flock of black and white birds. Branches swayed and sagged beneath their weight as they quorked and shat and preened. Endless pairs of dark eyes stared down and through him.

“There must be at least a hundred of them.” He looked more closely. Most of the birds were clutching green sprigs in their talons or beaks, maybe for their nests?

“An auspex would count them, and tell us the future.”

Ty glanced at Jasper, who was fastidiously settling his deerstalker on his bald head, his long fingers quivering. Jasper hoarded obscurities like they were two-for-one coupons. Was he taking the piss, as Effie would say?

“Don’t need an ‘auspex’ to tell us that,” said Ty, thinking of the twisted mass growing in his gut. In the movies, an alien would just hatch and burst out of your chest. Over quick. Industrial light and magic.

“I could do it, I think. There are several instructive folk rhymes to that purpose. Presuming the total number of birds divided cleanly into a number between one and ten. The real question is; what are they doing here?”

“Creeping me out?”

“Magpies are not indigenous to the area. They’ve come from somewhere else.”

Jasper unzipped his bag and stood. The magpies launched into the sky, a swirling flock, buzzing the old man like a swarm of bees.

Ty reached up and tugged Jasper to his knees. “Mistook you for a scarecrow,” he half-yelled over the burr of wings, “They’ll be gone in a minute.” He watched the birds circling directly overhead, wincing, then punched himself twice on the arm, trying to shake off the dread infusing his bones. That’s two for flinching.

“I should have counted them,” Jasper said, distraught.

“Call it a hundred. Ten by ten, nice and round. What’s ten?”

“Gold. Or a time of joyous bliss. Or, the Devil himself.”

Ty shook his head. Never one answer when three would do. Something plopped on his shoulder: a leafy sprig. More bits fell in a sudden pelting storm.

“Oh what the hell,” Ty shouted in exasperation. Both men ducked under the barrage. The rain of greenery was gentle, almost like a blessing. Ty found himself thinking distractedly of rice thrown at weddings. And then it was done.

Jasper picked up a bent blade adorned with small circular leaves. “Pennyroyal. Pudding grass if you want to get colloquial. I don’t know what they’d want with it; certainly not to eat.”

“Just saving it to heckle—” Ty exhaled as his stomach cramped tight. He rode out each pulsation of pain, biting the side of his tongue and clenching his fists. Jasper watched him worriedly, the unasked question plain in his pursed lips and half-raised eyebrows.

“Fine,” he managed, straightening. “No problem.” His eyes widened. “I take that back. Big problem.”

The unimpressive stand of birches they’d camped in had transformed into a hardwood forest, ancient trees rising forbiddingly tall, bedecked in verdant lichen and moss. The light overhead had taken on a cool quality, filtered through the layers of canopy.

“It’s a weald. Well, now we know from whence the magpies came.”

“Which is?”

To be continued on Wednesday….

The Red Pen of Doom

by Ari Marmell

I can’t help noticing that an awful lot of these guest blogs are focused, in whole or in part, on the process of getting published. Finding an agent. Using an agent. Finding a publisher. Dealing with rejection. Making yourself write even when the mood isn’t on you. And so on.

I also can’t say that I’m surprised at that, since variations on “How do I get published?” are among the most common questions I’ve been asked. (Second only, in recent months, to “Is there going to be a sequel to The Goblin Corps?” Which, obviously, isn’t exactly a question an author can complain about.) What I haven’t seen covered as much is a mistake that many authors, amateur and professional, make on a regular basis. It’s a mistake I myself have made in the past, and may, in fact, have delayed my success in becoming a published novelist by several years.

So, one of the big secrets that every one of us should know, yet so many of us forget: The editor is not your enemy.

(For the record, I’m also referring to other “official” feedback here—not just from editors, but agents, copy-editors, and possibly even fellow authors—but as editors are the primary source of such feedback, it’s to them that I’ll refer specifically.)

It’s not surprising that so many writers think of editors that way. Most of us have heard horror stories. The editor who altered the ending of a novel; who cut an entire chapter; who went through the manuscript and changed one particular character from a person into a badger. The editor, basically, who “just didn’t get it!”

…it takes a bit of ego, just the smallest touch of arrogance, to believe that someone else wants to read the ideas, the stories, the words that you put down on paper.

It’s also true that most authors (and yes, I absolutely include myself in this generalization) have something of an ego—maybe not in all aspects of our lives, but about our work. It’s almost a job requirement; it takes a bit of ego, just the smallest touch of arrogance, to believe that someone else wants to read the ideas, the stories, the words that you put down on paper. (Or on the screen.)

Said ego is also, however, often fairly fragile. Everything we do is about putting ourselves out there for others not only to see, but to judge. An attack on our work is an attack on us, or at least often feels that way. Our level of success is measured entirely by whether more people like our work than don’t.

Is it any surprise, then, that many of us react negatively to the idea of someone else coming in and changing our work? I’m not talking about correcting typos or the like, but tweaking the story? The characters? Word choice? Many authors have an almost knee-jerk objection to the notion. We crafted the story as we wanted it to appear, damn it! Who are you to change it? You want to shape a story, go write your own! And get off my lawn!

Okay, but here’s the thing. In the first instance, yes, there are some bad editors out there, and horror stories do happen. But that’s the case in any business, any industry. Judging all editors by those examples is like judging all movie directors by Ed Wood, or all swords-and-sorcery by the Gor series, or all politicians by… Well, okay. Bad example. Point is, those bad apples represent only a minority, and if you get stuck with one of them on one book, well, you’ll probably be more fortunate on the next.

But the part that really gets in some writers’ way, the part that often takes time and painful experience to learn, is this: Your writing’s not perfect. It has faults. It has places where it can be tightened up, or where changes are beneficial. The best writer alive, the best writer in history, wasn’t so flawless that a decent editor couldn’t improve their work somewhere.

The best writer alive, the best writer in history, wasn’t so flawless that a decent editor couldn’t improve their work somewhere.

It’s just the nature of the beast. We get set in our ways. We know our story so well that we don’t see the cracks; our brain just fills them in. Our eyes gloss over the errors. We get so attached to a great turn of phrase, a great description, or a great character, that we fail to recognize how wrong they are for the book.

It happens no matter how good we get, how creative we are, how certain we are, how famous or successful we are. And this applies equally to self-published books as to traditionally published ones. If you’re not going through a publisher who employs editors? Hire your own. But however you do it, work with one.

My first published non-tie-in novel, The Conqueror’s Shadow, includes short vignettes at the start of each chapter that fill in bits of the characters’ and setting’s history—mostly during an earlier period that’s often referred to in the book, but only lightly explored. Because of these vignettes, the characters are far deeper—in terms of growth, personality, and motivation—than they ever could have been without them.

They were a late-draft addition, and the idea of including them came not from me, but from my editor. I will happily go on record saying that The Conqueror’s Shadow would be a much lesser book without his input. Yet I was absolutely certain, when I submitted it, that it would almost certainly not change dramatically in rewrites.

I might have published an earlier draft of The Goblin Corps quite a few years ago, if I’d been willing to make some hefty alterations to the book. I’m actually glad I didn’t—I think it’s a great fit at Pyr Books, far better than it would have been for the publisher in question—but the fact remains that I wouldn’t even listen to said changes, let alone consider making them, because I was so thoroughly convinced that my writing didn’t need someone else fiddling with it. It took me years of growth, and of learning how to accept feedback thanks to my freelance game writing, before I was in the proper headspace to recognize that my fiction wasn’t some sort of holy writ.

(That innate writer’s arrogance I mentioned earlier? Yeah, that’s what happens when you let said arrogance grow too big.)

Any reasonable editor can and should be willing to debate with you, and explain their reasons if you don’t agree.

I’m not saying that even the best editor is flawless either, of course. Any reasonable editor can and should be willing to debate with you, and explain their reasons if you don’t agree. The same editor who elevated The Conqueror’s Shadow? He and I went back and forth something like six times on a particular chapter of the sequel, The Warlord’s Legacy, which he wanted to cut and I didn’t. Ultimately it stayed (and, I still feel, for the better)—but the point is, it was a discussion and a conversation, not a unilateral refusal on either side to consider the other.

Bottom line to all this? If you share the tendency with so many other authors (especially new ones) to assume that the editor is an adversary, rather than an ally, then not only are you less likely to see your books succeed, you’re less likely to be happy even with those books that do make it to shelves. The author’s ego is a rough beast, but one of the best things you can possibly do, if you want to be a writer, is to train it to play well with others.

Ari Marmell is a fantasy and horror writer, with novels and short stories published through Spectra (Random House), Pyr Books, Wizards of the Coast, and others. Ari’s most recent novel, The Goblin Corps, was released July of this year from Pyr Books and will be followed up with Thief’s Covenant due out early 2012, also with Pyr. Although born in New York, Ari  has lived the vast majority of his life in Texas—first Houston (where he earned a BA in Creative Writing at the University of Houston), and then Austin. He lives with his wife, George, two cats, and a variety of neuroses. For more information on Ari, please visit his website, www.mouseferatu.com.

Hidden Freak, Part 2

This week we’re writing a Round Robin story. S.C. Green posted part 1 on Monday. Amy McLane will post the conclusion on Friday. For now, though, settle in for part 2 in our tale of circus weirdness…

Hidden Freak, Part 2

Fix reached the edge of the woods first. Bobby ducked beneath an elm branch and stopped beside him.

“Whatcha waiting for?” Bobby reached both hands up to grasp the branch and let his tall frame fall forward.

Fix said nothing. Just spit.

“Scared?” Bobby knew which button to push.

“I ain’t scared.” Fix’s bicep swelled as he squeezed his right hand into a fist. He sniffed and curled his lip like a gash. “Just looking for the right way in.”

Bobby kicked away a pine cone. “Uh-huh.” And he strode off toward the big top.

The fence surrounding the carnival was rickety at best. Easy pickings. The hardest part for Bobby would be to slip his height through unnoticed.

Fix followed him out from the cover of the woods, his steps scuffing the dirt faster to keep up. Neither spoke. Bobby kept his hands tucked in his pockets and felt his pulse knocking at his temple. Thinking and doing are two different things. But Bobby was determined in the doing.

The carnival hadn’t officially opened. Come dark, the place would swarm with the townspeople, curious to see anything outside the daily drudge of their dull lives. But now, midday on an otherwise sleepy Thursday, the grounds were all but quiet.

“Going through the front door, dumbass?”

Bobby hated when Fix took that tone. Same one he’d heard his whole life, teased and knocked around. So he didn’t answer. Just kept walking, listening to the wind rustling back in the woods and the occasional sound from the tents and trailers ahead.  When he got close enough, he rounded the chain link and headed toward the back. Later, the action would be inside the big tent, sure. But Bobby knew the trailers were the place to start. Bobby searched beyond the fence for signs they’d been seen or trouble to get into. Fix followed, marking his path with globs of rancid spit.

“There,” Fix said, and Bobby looked to where he pointed. The break in the chain link that would let them slip through. Disappointment twisted Bobby’s stomach. He wished he’d seen it first. He ducked his head beneath the chain and the other six feet of him followed. Fix had more trouble with his bulk. He masked his pain with indifference as the metal scraped his spine; but Bobby saw. Bobby knew.

Inside, they both stood rooted, looking. Listening. A line of road-worn trailers circled the back of the lot. Cheap, splintered siding and windows pocked with rock holes.

“Which one you think’s got the clowns?” Fix whispered. He cracked his knuckles real slow.

Bobby shook his head, his eyes trained toward the end of the line, on the shiny Gulfstream with the plaid curtains flapping out the windows. Clowns or freaks, he didn’t care. That trailer was the one that called him. Three wooden steps led to its metal door. He’d have to bend nearly in half to get through.

“Come on,” he whispered. He had no doubt Fix would follow.

To be continued…

Novel Overhaul and Other Stuff

This last month has found me more productive than I can remember being in the last year. I’m trying to recall the moment when the switch flipped, but I’m straining and don’t want to risk pulling a brain muscle. Regardless of the reason, progress was made and I feel good.

My first novel has finally gone into revisions. I’ve tweaked things before, but this will be the first real overhaul. More than a tune-up, the whole engine will be dismantled, fixed, cleaned and reinstalled one part at a time. The prospect of doing that in the past has caused me to turn a blind eye to the project, but now I’ve got my tools in hand and working one scene after the other. Currently I’m looking at weaving in a subplot, maybe adding a relation between characters that wasn’t present before, and clearing up a plot question that, surprise-surprise, never got answered by the end.  I want the revised draft done by the holidays. The holidays, by and large, were meant for stresses of a different nature.

On top of that, I’ve also written an entirely new short story. With some cleaning up, I’m planning something special to do with that one later this year.

So now what?

I thoroughly enjoy these quasi-magical bursts of wordsmithing output. I find it akin to a runner’s high. Now here’s my worry. Usually these peaks of output are followed by valleys of writing drought. Up and down, up and down like waves in the ocean or squiggly lines on some monitor found in the TARDIS.

This month I plan to keep the momentum rolling forward. I won’t expect brilliance everyday. That would be an unreasonable expectation. I’m not even going to set a daily word goal. Since my focus is mainly revisions, that wouldn’t serve with cuts involved. I just plan on doing something, anything, everyday.

The Heist

The red-tail hawk coasted on an updraft of arid wind. Clark harnessed the bird, using her sharp yellow eyes to search for the 6:15 train running late out of Jerome. The hawk screamed defiance, but then her hunting instinct took over. Prey was prey, after all.

She spotted the long black beast approaching the cut crossing Stolen Horse Gulch and banked, preparing to dive and snatch the snake in her claws.

Clark crashed back into his body. His legs were numb, his hands sweating a storm inside his leather gloves. Catching his nerves, Pally snorted and shifted beneath him. Clark ran a soothing hand along the horses’ neck. The big pinto gelding always had been too clever for his own good.

“Well?” Foss prodded, his face wrinkled in disgust. The rancid oil he used to wax his mustache gleamed in the slanted afternoon sunlight.

“Let’s go.”

Clark put his heels to Pally, acutely aware of how Foss watched him, like a cur he wanted to kick, but didn’t dare in case the dog was rabid. This might be the crime that made him part of the McLaren Gang, but Clark would never be one of them, no matter what he did. Foss, Slim, even McLaren himself— they would never believe that he was only half a skinwalker. And wasn’t that always the way of it. Clark never caught himself a break, just the scraggedy tail ends of ‘em. Couldn’t get into any school. Tried his hand at farming, but even his dirt crops had been poor— fields rocky and thoroughly studded with caliche, a bastard clay that was too coarse to be useful and too tough for anything but weeds. He’d considered looking for his mother’s people, but Daddy swore up and down that they were all gone. Everyone said Mama was a Navaho or else maybe Yavapai but Daddy claimed her “O’Odham from Snaketown,” which made no sense any way you spread it, seeing as there was no such place and no such people—not that he’d ever heard tell of, anyway. He wondered what she’d think of him now, joining a band of toughs to take this train. Granted, if McLaren hadn’t managed to board in Jerome, there’d be no heist at all.

The sound of squealing breaks snapped Clark’s attention: McLaren had held up his end of the bargain.

“Think of the devil,” Clark muttered to Pally as they swept alongside the train. McLaren was spooky like that. Man gave Clark the cold shivers, truth be told.

Beside him Foss and Slim began to holler, firing into the air. Clark shook his head at the waste of bullets. Didn’t those fools reckon they’d need ‘em more in a moment? The guards weren’t going to go down without a fight. Reaching the express car, Clark dismounted, drew his piece, and approached. Foss jumped down to cover Clark as he wrenched open the cargo door.

“Holy God.”

 

And thus concludes today’s installment of THE HEIST. Tune in Wednesday for the next episode!

When is it done?

Our topic this week is “When is it done?” Or in other words, when is the thing you’re writing ready to be sent out into the world.

Can I just say: I feel completely ill-equipped to talk about this subject. Quite simply, I don’t know the answer.

I once heard Kevin McIlvoy speak on revisions, and he talked about revising a story 48 times and having it published and then revising it some more even after it was published because for him it wasn’t done yet. And, man, do I get that. I can stay in revisions forever, finding a better word, a better sentence structure, something more authentic or punchier or compelling.

But then…

I recently heard James A. Owen address revisions. His advice was to stop revising when you’re just making changes to make changes. In his words, endless revisions is like riding twenty miles on an exercise bike and getting nowhere. And I totally get that, too. Sometimes endless revisions is a way of hiding. It’s not done yet, so I don’t have to show it to anyone and face possible rejection.

If only there was some kind of recipe or formula. Maybe something like:

X words × Y drafts ÷ Z minutes = Done

(I never was that good at math.)

Does it depend on the project? In my experience, there are stories that race out of my brain almost complete. They require little revision. And there are stories that feel like pulling deep-rooted teeth and require many drafts before they’re even coherent. Both kinds of stories get rejected. Both get published. Revision seems to have little to do with it.

Is it done when there’s nothing left to change? I recently read a well-published novel that had several glaring copyediting errors. Was it not done yet?

So, because I have more questions than answers, and because this is something I wonder about and wrestle with, I’d like to hear from you.

When is it done?